【 James’ Tips🔑】

【 James’ Tips🔑】
Today’s tip is on the importance of a strong conclusion.

The following is a typical example of a student whose IELTS target is 7.0 but unfortunately is still performing at 6.0 or less 👀.
➡Topic Question:

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared free.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
📝📝Candidate conclusion:

“In conclusion, the admission to access essential information should be open to the whole community, however, vital and dangerous one should be narrowly provided.”
✅❎James’ comment on the student’s work:
Unnatural lexical item choice, “admission; narrowly provided”. “Community”?
Improper punctuation.
No demonstration of a range of complex sentence structures.
📝📝The right way, using the same ideas:

“In conclusion, based on humanitarian grounds in order to save lives, vital medical technologies should be shared freely for the benefit of the whole world notwithstanding that any technologies that have a military application which may pose a lethal threat should be safeguarded given their potential for misuse.”
If you merely do what everybody can do, you will get the mark that everybody can get.
If you want a higher mark that most people do not get, you have to do something better.
Would you like to try?💯
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Assessment will be emailed back to you.
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